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November 28, 2004
joe blakin' (life with parkinson's disease)
a few minutes to wipe
a great urge to type
i'm joe blakin'
hands all ashudder
keys all bejjudder
violent shakin'
at 5:30 dark
it's the cold not the Park'...
I tell myself lies o so well
as the heater goes on
...has the wavering gone?
not a paddlepop's chance down in hell
it may be that I'm fearful
emotional? tearful?
could be tension awaggin' my arm!
I shake when excited
and 'specialy when frighted
but I'm not now ...I'm restful and calm
must stop kidding myself
my problem's ... ... my health!
it's the Park that's the real villain here
why the eff was it given...
my present from heaven?
or a hellish big boot up the rear?
it's mod'rate some days
on others... ablaze
but time off for good conduct? never.
right now the shakes
are like bloody big quakes
bad day? or here forever?
(c) alan smith 2003
My first... a bit ocker, but it is me afterall.
Parkies ('the Park') is a mean rotten bastard
Posted by alan at November 28, 2004 5:52 PM
Comments
Congratulations on posting your first weblog entry. I hope that you get lots of visitors who enjoy your poetry.
Posted by: Robyn at November 28, 2004 6:53 PM
Hello Alan - many congratulations on the new blog. I'm looking forward to reading more of your poetry.
Be as well as possible.
Very best wishes from a fellow blogger in Wales.
Posted by: Michael Nobbs at November 28, 2004 7:26 PM
It's a good poem -- the rollicking rhythm makes a stark contrast with the subject matter. Kind of like Robert W. Service for the 21st century :)
Posted by: Nancy at November 28, 2004 7:28 PM
Hello. Congratulations on your new blog -- and thanks for posting (and writing) the poem. I love the voice and the rhythm, the honesty. Looking forward to reading more...
Posted by: Nina Ricker at November 29, 2004 12:06 AM
What powerful writing! It's very moving. Thank you for sharing it.
Best Wishes from Texas
Posted by: Kathleen at November 29, 2004 4:12 AM
Alan,
Congrats on inaugurating your blog with a very evocative poem! Wishing you happiness and healing ...
Karen
Posted by: Karen Winters at November 29, 2004 4:29 AM
Courageous. Insightful. Look forward to future postings,
Posted by: Anastasia at November 29, 2004 10:16 AM
Keep kicking 'the Park' back - I've bookmarked you!
Best wishes and positive vibes
Posted by: Elaine at November 29, 2004 6:28 PM
My grandpa had Parkinson's. Your description brings back memories good and bad. He would have loved your poem. Why the eff indeed.
Laura
Posted by: Laura at November 29, 2004 8:31 PM
Hello to everyone who wrote these kind comments. I am desparately trying to visit all your blogs/sites.I have a lot to learn, so please forgiv e any inappropriate actions/words/lack of words. i will not avoid'naughty words' in poems, but will run a warning in the first line. my objective after today is one poem each week
alan
ps i think i know how to avoid multiple notificationa, but am still being asked to clear my own comments, lol. getting there slowly
Posted by: alan at December 1, 2004 5:51 AM
Alan love your poems and your humour.
Please keep writing and thank you...
Posted by: Jeanette at December 2, 2004 12:06 PM
oh my you are clever
more wit than I ever
saw piled in one head
oh how exactly you write
I could read you all night
as i toss and go Yay in my bed.
I got my address wrong back there
( I forgot the 't' ) it is
oldbobt07@yahoo.com
Posted by: oldBob at December 5, 2004 7:02 AM