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-- 09 March, 2006 --

The Onion Woman

Pink public smile, brittle, paper thin
Wraps around her onion-self.
A spray of bitter juices set free
By a moment's knife edge
Brings tears to the eyes and
Leaves sour memories on the tongue.
Revealed her inner self lies
In coils, like small, blind worms.
No crisp sweetness here
Only slowly greying decay -
Life's disappointments

© Robyn Smith 2006

It has been some time since I have written a poem. This one was inspired by a prompt from the Writerspark Yahoo group in which we were asked to write something that included or was inspired by the word "Onion". After 3 or 4 revisions, this was my effort.

Posted by robynls at March 9, 2006 7:13 PM

Comments

Glad you wrote one.

You're one talented woman Robyn!

Excellent poem...
What next?

Posted by: Blue . [TypeKey Profile Page] at March 9, 2006 7:42 PM

High praise indeed, coming from you ... artist, photographer, surfer, blogger, business-person extraordinaire! Thank you.

Posted by: Robyn at March 9, 2006 7:48 PM

You are like the coat of many colors, a woman of many talents. I applaud your adventuresome personality.

Posted by: Bex at March 9, 2006 9:49 PM

Very well written Robyn, though very very sad.

Posted by: Rita at March 10, 2006 12:27 AM

Good grief the poem reminds me of mom!

Posted by: Bonnie at March 10, 2006 12:52 AM

Oh, so very well done,

I have known a few folks of that persuasion.

Acrid on occasion,

Causing tears of frustration,

Long gone, they.

Posted by: Denver doug at March 10, 2006 2:49 PM

Hi Robyn,

Thanks everso for your email. I'm not very together at the mo for various reasons - elderly parents are a worry and my own health not so good either. Plus "life keeps happening"!

Hopefully will get more organised over the next few weeks (though have dentist visit next Friday so am dreading that!) and get to posting again soon. Haven't even taken many photos since younger daughter got married in November, let alone managed any drawing. :-(

It's nice to know that you are keeping an eye on me from afar! :-)

Best wishes from Liverpool,

Maggie

PS sorry to put this in your comments but I'm too brainfogged to find your email addy just now

Posted by: Maggie Wallace at March 12, 2006 10:34 AM

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